NORA: Can you read my novelization of the first season of the MTV SCREAM series? It’s not the best writing of mine, but it’s 100% way different than the show, but improved and better.
ME: (Receives file) Improved and better... ? I don't really understand why you're writing a novelization of a show you don't seem to like.
NORA: oh i love the show!!!!(: More details, more stuff added, fillers that weren’t filled in taken out. Only thing I didn’t like were fake tears when someone died. in the book, I added more details more in depth to her character. When will is killed, she just doesn’t stop and see, she screams to the top of her lungs. I’m going to write a separate part of emma’s voice over what she thinks feels etc
ME: Okay, I'm reading your novelization. The descriptions are very vivid. I think you mean vise like grip, not vice like.
NORA: Yeah there’s a lot of stuff in the show that didn’t make sense that i took out and replaced. you’ll see what I mean it’s hard to explain. imma fix that whole thing up. and exactly. I haven’t even finished episode 8 yet. I don’t wanna make too many changes in the novel from the series like I wanna keep the story in the way it is but take out all stuff that doesn’t make sense and put new stuff in along with fillers that were not filled incause there was a lot of them and season one and the fact that I’m in the process of writing in the entire season and the book is pretty damn impressive
ME: I've read a few pages of your pilot novelization. It seems solid, but I will note: you're spending a lot of time describing how things look, as though describing a TV show. Prose isn't a visual medium, so it tends to be more effective if you focus on how it feels to experience and live in that scene as opposed to what it looks like to watch the scene.
NORA: That’s my idea for it is to make it look like you’re watching a show what you’re reading a novel because some people have a problem watching versus reading so this isn’t just for horror is also for people who have disabilities I can read better versus watching something or they have hearing aids. Because there are people out there who have a hard time hearing or watching something so I did it also for people who have disabilities
ME: Also, when you have two characters talking, it's important to put their dialogue in separate paragraphs. That way, the division between who's talking is clear.
NORA: That’s what I’m working on like I said I got a lot of cleaning up to do but it’s gonna take a bit but once the whole book is done I’m gonna have an editor completely added the entire book to clean it up and polish it. I’m gonna be doing something different I’m gonna be having a killer’s POV on how he tastes Clark and ties into the tree that are stabbing him because there’s just a lot of stuff that wasn’t filled in the show that I’m gonna fill in
ME: You call Brooke the queen bee of the school. Wasn't that Nina? Brooke was only referred to as queen bee after Nina's death in the TV show, and in this chapter of your novelization, Nina is still alive.
NORA: Nina called her that’s her nickname. It’s all in the book. The pilot is 100% different in the novel
ME: The only reference I'm seeing to queen bee in the show's dialogue: Noah says Nina was the queen bee in episode 8. So Brooke isn't queen bee of the school until after Nina dies. Also, your book does not contain any reference to "queen bee" being Brooke's nickname. And I've read the four sections and you've sent me a prose adaptation of the pilot episode and, as far as I've read, the next three episodes of the TV show. But it's not "100% different." It does have a few extra scenes and details that seem arbitrarily altered.
NORA: Like i said, it’s not going to be 100% accurate, mainly flowing with the story with fresh takes on them. Everything is being edited and etc. Is there at least any pros that you like about us so far
ME: It reads really well. It's easy to tell what's happening. You call the Lakewood Slasher a "reaper." I'm not sure the Lakewood Slasher is really a reaper, which tends to be a description of the Grim Reaper.
NORA: yes i know this …. it’s something different
ME: The Brandon James mask is a face and the raincoat doesn't really fit the reaper cloak profile. The movie described the costume as a Father Death costume to excuse the ghost mask instead of a skull mask. But if you don't have a skull mask or a reaper's robes, your killer can't be described as a reaper.
NORA: Ik. like i said, wanted to do something different.
ME: But you use an image of the Lakewood Slasher on your book cover and that's not a reaper. Also, why are you changing the most popular girl from Nina to Brooke, anyway?
NORA: i’m not ….im going by the story . like i said it’s a WORK in progress. gotta give me credit ….
ME: The TV plotline is pretty explicit that Nina was the most popular or notorious girl in school until she died, and only after that did Brooke become "queen bee". Why did you change it? The reason the story makes Nina more popular than Brooke: that way, when Nina dies, every character has a reaction, whether it's a main character or a guest star or an extra. So demoting Nina is confusing to me. What are you trying to accomplish?
NORA: Nina’s character wasn’t really explored so there was no need to. Couldn’t find no background on her, no reason why she was the way she was, what video files she had, nothing. Can’t just make something up that wouldn’t make sense to the readers.
ME: I still don't understand. Why did you change her popularity?
NORA: Because her character wasn’t explored
ME: I don't see how that corresponds to changing how popular she was.
Her role as the first victim whose death, due to her popularity, is a high profile, high attention event. I don't see how changing that helps the story. It seems really random.
NORA: Just went with how it goes
ME: But that isn't "how it goes". Look, I understand that sometimes, there are characters we don't like. Nina is not an easy character to like. She is unpleasant, hurtful, cruel. However, I think that, as writers, we should find some point of interest and something to care about for every character we write, even ones who irk us.
And when writing a novelization of a live action work, we should at minimum appreciate the function of the character, and in Nina's case, her popularity is the catalyst for the season arc: an extremely high profile murder. To alter her popularity doesn't serve the plot; it strikes me as you taking a passive-aggressive jab at a character you disliked by removing the only thing she had going for her, really, her popularity. To remove that undermines the storyline you're novelizing.
Also, your complaints about Nina... they betray a certain unfamiliarity with television. When adapting a TV story to prose, it's important to at least understand why the TV show was written the way it was, even if you didn't care for it.
TV characters don't always need a ton of backstory. Emma doesn't have a ton of backstory. TV characters are often about the actor's performance rather than in-depth details of their lives. In Nina's case, Bella Thorne's acting conveys everything about her: she has control issues, she's domineering, she treats everyone as a game piece to belittle and mock, and the set design of her home shows: she can get away with it because her family is wealthy. As we learn more about how she was blackmailing people in Season 1, it's clear that she didn't need the money; she just liked being in control.
Nina wasn't onscreen much because they only had actress Bella Thorne for two days of filming and also, the character dies in the first episode, so there wasn't much room to explore. TV is a very time limited medium. To criticize the lack of background is not a reasonable criticism of TV.
As someone writing the novelization, it's up to you to engage in the exploration, to create the background, to delve further... rather than to just declare there's nothing to write.
I'm also concerned that your comments indicate a certain dislike and contempt for the show. It makes me wonder why you are writing a novelization if you think so poorly of how it handled its characters, even a relatively small but critical one like Nina. I wonder if you are writing out of spite towards a TV show without understanding why it made certain choices, even if you disagree with them.
Changing Nina's popularity, making the Lakewood Slasher a "reaper" when he is not -- these are arbitrary changes that seem really random, and when choices in writing are made without purpose or intent, the product becomes haphazard. I think when we change something in an adaptation, there should be a clear reason beyond "that's just how it goes" or "I didn't like that character."
NORA: Dude…:i didn’t write nothing about nina cause I don’t like her, i didn’t write anything cause there’s nothing about her there ..i have nothing dislike any of the characters, there was just nothing there for me to fill in for her .
ME: If you feel that there is "nothing there", why are you subtracting what little there is, her popularity, from her and giving that role to Brooke? Nina dies at the beginning of the story, handing that role over to Brooke by default anyway, so saying Nina was never popular or notorious seems like a really arbitrary change. Unless this isn't a novelization, but an alternate universe?
NORA: wow….this is EPISODE BY EPISODE. Things have been changed. I’m sorry that it does not live up to your standards, but a lot of stuff is different and for you to bash someone’s work is not okay whatsoever
ME: I have no idea how "EPISODE BY EPISODE" pertains to randomly changing a character's social status when it's essential to the plot... and if "a lot of stuff is different", why is it a novelization? How is it "bashing" to ask you why your novelization is making the changes that you're making?
NORA: SHUT UP ABOUT MY WRITING
ME: I noticed that 'your' writing keeps using the same phrases. "Brow furrowed" appears 53 times, "a voice laced with" appears 37 times, "his movements swift and deadly" appears 48 times. This and the text "You’re using 2.0 Flash Experimental" appearing at the start of Chapter 3 tells me this is AI generated text. The Wiki entry for Brooke calls her the "queen bee," but your AI has applied that term to her prematurely by using it before Nina's death. The Wiki entry for the Lakewood Slasher also refers to him as a "reaper," mistakenly so. I think your AI tool scraped those entries without spotting the mistakes. It seems to me that calling this writing a "fresh take" is a deflection over how your AI has made some errors.
NORA: I SPENT TWO YEARS WRITING THIS AND YOU ARE TRASHING IT
ME: You took two years to write this -- using AI -- and you're only seven episodes in? At a rate of novelizing 3.5 episodes a year, you're not going to be done with all 24 episodes of the show until 2030. When you started writing this two years ago, the show was eight years old. The show is now 10 years old. At your rate of completion, it will be 15 years old. Are we sure we can consider that "fresh"?
NORA: STOP SHITTING ON MY BOOK
ME: Are you sure it's your book? This is a novelization of a TV show. You didn't write the outline or any of the dialogue. And judging from the AI-generated prose, you also didn't write any of the descriptions. Why are you so offended by my comments about a story you didn't plot with dialogue you didn't script and descriptions you didn't write?
NORA: FUCK YOU AND FUCK OFF
(Nora has left the chat.)